Thursday, October 1, 2009

Dialogue

1-I'm glad you came. I was worried that you wouldn't show.
2-I think we need to get something straight right off the bat. This, me meeting you here, doesn't mean that I trust you.
1-What does it mean?
2-It means I'm giving you second chance.
1- I know I don't deserve that chance but thank you for giving it anyway.
2- Yeah well don't go expecting much more.
1- I won't. I just want to get to know you. Maybe if all goes well you would be willing to meet me here again?
2- Maybe.
1- Well I don't want to waste any amount of time that we have together. So tell me about yourself, Alex.
2- What do you want to know?
1- So your what 16 now? What grade are you in?
2- Yeah I'm 16. I'm a Junior at West Valley High.
1- I remember my days there. Do you like it?
2- As much as anybody likes school, I guess.
1- Ha ha. Yeah, you've got a point there.
2- Where do you live now, Richard?
1- I live in Fresno.
2- Do you have a job?
1- Yeah I'm a sales represenetive for AT&T.
2- How long have you had that job?
1-  A while.
2- So you are holding down a steady job now?
1- Yeah... I can hold a steady job.
2- So you HAVE been holding one?
1- I don't want to lie to you... I also didn't want to get into this today... I'm still struggling with my addictions but please don't just write me off I'm trying so hard!
2- Drugs or Alcohol?
1- No more drugs I have been clean of those for 3 years now. I got into a rehab program that helped me a ton with that but about 6 months ago I picked up the bottle again.
2- I don't know how you can expect me to feel safe around you, to trust you, or to be around you when you aren't fully in control of yourself. I'm sorry dad, but I can't continue this until you are sober.

4 comments:

  1. Wow. I wasn't seeing that last part coming. Really good twist, and I like how you set it up, such as Alex calling his dad Richard. Great job.

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  2. Very good job. I really enjoyed how it ended! Keep it up!

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  3. It was his dad? Very nice. You threw me off when you had the son call his dad Richard. I was a little confused at the first, because of the 1, 2 mistake where you had #2 speak twice in a row.

    What does the THIS refer to in the last line? What are they meeting for? Just to rekindle a relationship?

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  4. i really really liked this. i like how you put the high stakes at the very end when you pull out the twist of it being her dad. crazy!

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